Is the opening to this novel good? Would you read on? How could I improve?

omg im a writer (girl) and i totally love this! i wouldnt change anything really, just maybe say something like...well, as ur talking about how u have so much life ahead of you, and how you arnt really to die yet, say something about how she isnt either, and stuff like that, talk about how she must be feeling, becuase you said u really loved her, so you've got to be thinking about her feelings too... i would SOOOO read on and i absolutely want to know what this book is going to be about, whether is it up to this point or is it continung on after the chaos... i've got to know! i wold totally read this, buy this...hope it helped and ur an amzing writer!